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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The popularity of ready-made foods has aided individuals to meet up with the pace of modern
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
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 relieving one from the stress of making home-made foods, it
also
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 gives ample time that could be used for other things like leisure or take care of
undone
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undoing
work
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.
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, maintaining
this
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 trend can be costly and
overtime
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over time
 could expose one to unhealthy eating habit. In my opinion, I think the disadvantages of fast foods outweighs the
convenience
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 it gives to its consumers.
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, sustaining
convenience
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 food lifestyle could be expensive. Most people spend twice the amount used to prepare a home-made food that would
last
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 for a week in a couple of days.
This
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 cost could vary based on the content of the package. A
prepacked
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Prepacked
 rice, protein, salad and a bottle of water would cost much more than a
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Prepacked
 rice only.
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, ready-made foods can be a risk factor to obesity and cardiac diseases. A lot of fast
foods
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food
are made
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is made
 up of carbohydrate, fats and oil.
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 makes most
convenience
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 diets unbalanced, sometimes insatiable and may
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consume
 in large quantities. For individuals with sedentary
work
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 habit, the impact on health is more and could lead to cardiac arrest and death.
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,
this
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 type of dieting saves one a lot man hours that could have been spent in the kitchen making food. Some people wake up very early in the morning to make breakfast before preparing for
work
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 every day. While the saved time from doing fast foods can be used for other things like for leisure, rest or do more
work
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, the negative consequences on human health is far more important to be overlooked. I strongly think the practice of
convenience
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 dieting should be moderated or completely avoided.
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