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You stayed at your friend’s house when you attended a conference in Australia. Unfortunately, you left a large envelope with some important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: thank your friend for the stay describe where you left the envelope ask him/her to return it to you by post Begin your letter as follows: Dear _________

#friend’s #house #conference #australia #envelope #documents #room #friend #stay #post #_________
Dear Marry, I hope you are doing well! Thank you for letting me stay at your place when I attended a conference in Australia
last
 week. And
also
, thank you for showing me around in Perth. It was
such
 a beautiful city I have ever seen. It was a wonderful time to catch up with you, get to know your family and meet your newborn baby. I hope we can meet up someday again. Anyway, I need a favour from you. A sealed brown envelope with some important documents was left in the room where I stayed at yours. It should be placed in the first drawer from the top of the desk. There was a red wording of confidential on the envelope. I would be grateful if you could find it and post it to me by registered DHL air mail. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you very much for your help! Best regards, Jane Hunter
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task achievement
The letter is well-organized and addresses all aspects of the task. However, adding more detail about the contents or importance of the documents might make the urgency clearer.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs are logically structured, but you can enhance coherence by using more linking words or phrases to smoothly transition between thanking, describing the location, and asking for the favor.
task achievement
You have effectively thanked your friend and acknowledged their hospitality.
coherence cohesion
The layout of the letter, including greetings and signing off, is appropriate and well-structured.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a distinct idea, which aids readability and understanding.
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