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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the
utilization
 of
fish
 and different kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the most popular kind of meat was
chicken
,
the
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and the
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 least popular one was
the
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fish
.
In addition
, the
consumption
 of
beef
 and
lamb
 decreased dramatically. In 1979, the
consumption
 of
beef
 and
lamb
were
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was
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 about the same, with
lamb
 higher
of
Change preposition
at
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 10
grams
; the higher
the
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consumption
was
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of was
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beef
to
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220
grams
, compared to 60
grams
 of
fish
utilization
. Over a ten-year period between 1979 and 1989,
beef
utilization
 fluctuated considerably, and there was a sharp increase in the
consumption
 of
chicken
 by 60
grams
.
In contrast
, there was a rapid drop in the
utilization
 of
lamb
 to 100g,
while
 the figure for
fish
 declined slightly to 50g. In 1989,
chicken
 and
beef
 had equal
consumption
to
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of
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 200
grams
; the
consumption
 of
lamb
 and
fish
 decreased
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by moderate
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moderate
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moderately
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 to 100
grams
 and 50
grams
 respectively. Between 1989 and 2004, the
utilization
 of
chicken
 reached its peak
to
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at
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 240
grams
. At the same time, the
consumption
 of
lamb
 and
fish
 continued to decrease to 50
grams
 and 40
grams
 respectively. There was a significant drop in
beef
consumption
, with a decrease of over 70
grams
 in just 10 years from 1994 to 2004.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words utilization, fish, chicken, consumption, beef, lamb, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • steady increase
  • most consumed meat
  • relatively stable
  • general decline
  • pronounced decline
  • over the years
  • throughout the period
  • depicts
  • span
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