You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

Accommodation Officer 54, Catherine Road Edinburg Dear Sir/Madam, First of
all
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I would like to thank you for allocating me
an
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accommodation at the college hostel.
Besides
, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my roommate and
requesting
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a separate single room in the following month. Despite
of
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having so many problems living together, I am stating some of those are very serious.
Firstly
, he used to stay awake till
the
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late
night
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and keep watching movies and listening to music at a very loud volume and high bass.
Secondly
, he allows visitors often at our place and
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all night long
while
keeping the lights on until they are finished.
Lastly
, he uses my belongings without prior permission and missing regularly.
For instance
, during my terms, it makes me struggle more on concentrating my studies and having a good night’s sleep.
As a result
, I cannot do well in exams and consistently
getting
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poor grades. In
this
circumstance, I cannot let it go as it is affecting my health and study both ways and
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to change my accommodation immediately.
Therefore
, I would be grateful if you could arrange
me
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a single room
in
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the following month. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Mahmudul Hasan
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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