Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extend do you agree..

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There is a view that it is now worthless to

visit

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museum

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a museum

the museum

to gain knowledge about different

culture

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and history as these

days all

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days, all

information

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related to

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are available on the internet. I completely disagree with

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thought.

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of all, the depth

information

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regarding

culture

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which

can not

cannot

gain through electronic medium on the internet as they only cover brief view about it.

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, it is easy to adopt basic ideas about different social group’s clothes and structure of

house

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the house

from the pictures

availalble

obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service

available

on the

internet but

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internet, but

to feel about the atmosphere in reality, people has to

visit

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the

museum

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because

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museum

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the museum

such

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a place where things from different heritage and ethics are being stored for viewing

purpose

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purposes

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, less

information

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from the computer can be

misguid

poorly conceived or thought out

misguided

or can not

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

one’s desire for understanding different

culture

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which can only be done in

physical

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a physical visit

visit

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Suggestion

the

museum

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. Another one is that people used to be more motivated by looking, touching and

listening

(law) a proceeding (usually by a court) where evidence is taken for the purpose of determining an issue of fact and reaching a decision based on that evidence

hearing

about history compare to reading about them online.

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, learning about how one’s country got the freedom in a war by

visting

the activity of making visits

visiting

war

museum

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is more effective than reading in the article online.

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, people feel more inspired and understand the value of their freedom through monuments and equipment being used in the war of freedom.

Result

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The result

this

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, energetic

youngester

a young person of either sex

youngster

youngsters

sometime do register

themself

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

with the

defence

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defending

army after visiting

such

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museum

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and that develops country’s army strength. In conclusion,

although

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infromation

a message received and understood

information

related various

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culture

Suggestion

cultures

and history available on the

interenet

a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange

internet

intranet

, it

can not

cannot

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

people’s requirement in terms of depth

information

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and motivation. To do so, personal

visit

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such

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museum

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is required.

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