Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extend do you agree..

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There is a view that it is now worthless to
visit
museum
Suggestion
a museum
the museum
to gain knowledge about different
culture
and history as these
days all
Accept comma addition
days, all
information
related to
this
are available on the internet. I completely disagree with
this
thought.
First
of all, the depth
information
regarding
culture
which
can not
can not
cannot
gain through electronic medium on the internet as they only cover brief view about it.
For example
, it is easy to adopt basic ideas about different social group’s clothes and structure of
house
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the house
from the pictures
availalble
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
on the
internet but
Accept comma addition
internet, but
to feel about the atmosphere in reality, people has to
visit
the
museum
because
museum
Suggestion
the museum
is
such
a place where things from different heritage and ethics are being stored for viewing
purpose
Suggestion
purposes
.
Thus
, less
information
from the computer can be
misguid
poorly conceived or thought out
misguided
or can not
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
one’s desire for understanding different
culture
which can only be done in
physical
Suggestion
a physical visit
visit
in
Suggestion
to
the
museum
. Another one is that people used to be more motivated by looking, touching and
listening
(law) a proceeding (usually by a court) where evidence is taken for the purpose of determining an issue of fact and reaching a decision based on that evidence
hearing
about history compare to reading about them online.
For instance
, learning about how one’s country got the freedom in a war by
visting
the activity of making visits
visiting
war
museum
is more effective than reading in the article online.
In other words
, people feel more inspired and understand the value of their freedom through monuments and equipment being used in the war of freedom.
Result
Suggestion
The result
of
this
, energetic
youngester
a young person of either sex
youngster
youngsters
sometime do register
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
with the
defence
Suggestion
defending
army after visiting
such
museum
and that develops country’s army strength. In conclusion,
although
infromation
a message received and understood
information
related various
culture
Suggestion
cultures
and history available on the
interenet
a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange
internet
intranet
, it
can not
can not
cannot
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
people’s requirement in terms of depth
information
and motivation. To do so, personal
visit
to
such
museum
is required.
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