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Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The lack of accommodation has become a serious urban social issue in many metropolitan areas of the world. It has been argued that only the leaders of the countries can tackle
this
 problem. In my opinion, without the supporting from other parties, the
government
 could not cope well with the housing shortage. It cannot be denied that country management system plays a vital role in many of our lives, but
nevertheless
government
 intervention would hamper the private sector.
For instance
, the supply of urban spaces is constrained by locally controlled land use plans that make the property developers difficult to build housing in the places where it is most highly valued—in dense urban settings.
Although
, there’s a growing demand for urban living. Given its role in attracting public consumption and accelerating economic development, the real estate industry should be at the mercy of the market, rather than the
government
. Another drawback of state control over the housing market is that it could pose a huge burden upon the state. The
government
 has borne the funding for various affordable public housing programs, and concern has arisen because of the poor condition of the surrounding environment, traffic connectivity and numerous other social and service facilities like schools, markets, or hospitals.
For example
, most of social flats are outside the expensive centre of Ho Chi Minh, the social housing projects may boast affordable price tags even to low-income groups, but ultimately the long commute between home and work rendered
this
 to become a disadvantage.
Consequently
, the programme of building a large amount of public housing will probably heavily burden a country. To conclude, I believe that governments play an important role in meeting basic housing demands of individuals, but the joint effort of both
government
 and private sector is required.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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