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some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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For students, A gap in the study may have both pros and cons for their whole lives. Some students take
this
 risk and some are not between finishing
school
 and going to university. I think the advantages is outweighed on disadvantages.
Firstly
, in the age of complete the
school
, most students are not enough mature to take the decision of their lives and they are just doing what their parents and relatives told them. Whether they are interested in it or not.
Therefore
, many times they ruin their entire life. Apart from
this
, Those who take the
year
 off after
school
 have a lot of
time
 to decide what is their strongest zone and what is more likely to do for the rest of their life which makes them satisfied.
Furthermore
, They introspect itself and think about the solution of their question which helps them to select a right direction for their lives.
Also
, these break
time
Suggestion
times
 they use for the preparation for the other competitive exams too. At that
time
, They meet their relatives who have already in these fields and pass through
this
. And take the suggestion of various fields too.
Moreover
, In
this
one
year
 off they explore their hobbies and
also
 go for the
one
 your courses or internship in the company, which will help them to great impact on their resume in the positive ways for their future jobs.
Besides
 of all that advantages some disadvantages are too. Children are getting bored after the take off for
one
year
 from their studies.
this
Suggestion
This
 takes so much
time
 to start the all over again.
additionally
Suggestion
Additionally
, some immature students saw their friends, which are doing great in their college without taking a gap off after the
school
.
Therefore
, They take a wrong decision from peer and parents pressure and suicide itself. Which is very ridiculous according to everyone. To conclude, some students take
one
year
 off between
school
 and university which I thought a great decision to explore a valuable
time
 for themselves. I totally agree with it.

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