Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked.

Tourism
, holiday making and travel are frequently increasing
social aspect
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the social aspect
of the world. It is a leisure activity to
visit
features of a
place
like landscape and town scape away from
home but
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home, but
very beautiful and historical to see and admire. Many
tourist
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tourists
want their journey to be very different and interesting so, they
visit
some particular places that are now termed as
tourist
destinations where
tourist
can relax and feel a sort of change from their ordinary life. These places are gaining profit in revenue by
tourism
and now it is becoming all time business for these places and
this
is forming many disadvantages to tourists. Plan your holidays to a
place
is becoming a fashion these days for visitors. As they think planing long holiday trips is just to show off their money status in the society. In
this
business everyone involved in earning huge amount of profits
such
as airlines give monthly passage
for
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to
a destination and these monthly criteria takes a hand full of money from
tourist's pocket
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the tourist's pocket
. The government of these places
also take
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also takes
has also taken
some charges from tourists as to ensure their
visit
and to make economic
gain
from
tourism
, government constantly advertises these places through media like film shooting as these are allowed if the directors agrees to show the beautiful
tourist
sights in their movies. Even the small scale shops earn profits by doubling the price of
product
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the product
a product
which tourists are buying and hotels too double their rates for them.
Thus
,
this
increases the economy of that
place
and
thus
,
tourism
is responsible for developing more hotels with larger areas, more sophisticated shops, more interesting from
different agencies side
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the different agency side
different agency side
.
This all
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Thus, all
Thus all
progress is leading to deforesting acres of land to form these facilities and that
place
's natural beauty is in danger of extinction.
Tourist
are looted by all means in these places
an
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a
crimes
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crime
like robbery, murder, molestation,
etc
studies intended to provide general knowledge and intellectual skills (rather than occupational or professional skills)
arts
and
tourist
are increasing in these
places
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place's
day
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days
by day. Nowadays,
tourist
are getting
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is getting
alert
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more alert
of these incidents and they are avoiding a
visit
to these places. Generally, we hear in
news
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the news
about
decline
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the decline
in
tourist
rate in a particular
place
this
might be the result of all
these practice
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these practices
this practice
. I am saying we should not
gain
profit from
tourism but
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tourism, but
we should not try illegal methods to
gain
more profit because it will destroy the values of the
place
from the international
tourist
destination places and
also
reduce your long term
gain
from
tourism
. All the disadvantages cannot be overlooked by both
tourist
and government, they should act
accordingly
.
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