Some people say that there is too much harmful content on the internet. They say the only way to make the internet safe is for the government to censor the content of websites. To what extent do you think the government should control what information is available on the internet?
The world wide web has become the greatest in being visited over the years. Some commentators argue that the quality of information given to people is damaging their perception of life.
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others suggest that removing harmful websites makes it safer. I believe that the local authorities should remove only the worst negative information.
As we acknowledge people and teenagers are becoming more immersed in the internet. The current data that we see today give us a wide range of knowledge sources, that actually can be useful. Linking Words
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, high-quality contents are presented in videos or sketches which help us to become better, Linking Words
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, surfacing on the internet increases the probability of watching inadequate content and Linking Words
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can produce psychological damage to our offspring. Linking Words
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, pornography and core death videos are impacting dramatically the brain of them. Linking Words
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, they become more stressful, unkind and lonely people, which implies changing their lifestyle in the worst way. For that reason, in my view, governmental authorities should tackle Linking Words
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some websites are practically useful to learn something. The authorities should block specific pages to avoid harm to our children and teenagers. In my view, removing Linking Words
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terrible information can increase confidence in them to be friendly and good members of society.Linking Words
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The essay should more clearly delineate the balance between the amount of control and the freedom on the internet.
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