Nowadays shopping has become a new favorite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? should they be encouraged to develop other hobbies?

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In the recent years, shopping is the prime hobby for the teenage people. I assume that

this

may be they are not finding other options which was present in the past.I believe whether or not younger generation should involve themselves productive activities like reading

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Going to the outlet for purchasing goods become one the important habit for the juvenile. Due to the rising amount of a shopping centre

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and

also

those places are so near to residents, went for buying easily.

Although

they do not need any particular product.

For example

, researcher published an article in the Time magazine that 80% young people

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Thus

, it is clear that going to shopping is increased because of

conveniency

the state of being suitable or opportune

convenience

. Younger citizen should adopt

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

kind of pastime

such

as reading or swimming. By studying they can develop their inner sense of humour, followed by learning or practicing swimming would be kept them fit. Having said that a teenage

people

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person

should use their time effectively. If they use their time with shaping their

life, it would bring more best ramification than doing

shopping

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the shopping

leisurely.

For example

, people who read lots of novel develop more sense of humour than other people, those people can solve their everyday problem easily without help

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from

others.

Therefore

, it is indeed important to incorporate with different activities by the teen. In conclusion, despite being the habit of a younger

generations

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generation

to go to

mall

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the mall

a mall

for

this

easiets

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easier

easiest

route.

Indeed it

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Indeed, it

is necessary to develop reading habit as well as swimming for their better health for

future

Suggestion

the future

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Nowadays shopping has become a new favorite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? should they be encouraged to develop other hobbies?

Your opinion

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