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Now a days we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #amount
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Thirty or forty years ago we did not have
such
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 a great variety of products to use in our daily life, by the way our technologies were limited to tv, radios and telephones. We did not use so many things in our daily life as we are using in now a days and it looked all normal at the time. Population is growing and in relation to
this
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 we do produce more and more
rubish
worthless material that is to be disposed of
rubbish
. As our daily requirements are higher than it used to be. Any business that has something to offer to their customers are investing money in packaging to make
more handier
Suggestion
handier
 to carry or more attractive to catch
clients eye
Suggestion
the client's eye
client's eye
a client's eye
client's eyes
. All these packages when
reache
reach a destination, either real or abstract
reached
race
rice
 customers
will became
Suggestion
will become
 as a rubbish as it won’t be used in their daily routine. In my
opinion someone
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opinion, someone
 who had an idea to sort the
rubish
worthless material that is to be disposed of
rubbish
rabbis
robes
 made
huge impact
Suggestion
a huge impact
 to save our planet. Keeping in mind that for glass and plastic it takes ages to disappear from our planet. Small little things can help our population to reduce the amounts of
rubish
worthless material that is to be disposed of
rubbish
.
For
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example all
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example, all
 organic waste can be made to compost which can be used in someone’s garden.
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Also I
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Also, I
 am very surprised that large clothing companies are introducing clothing made from recycled materials. A simple handmade shopping bags could be
great idea
Suggestion
a great idea
 to use for everyday shopping
instead
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 of buying plastic bags with every purchase. In my opinion all those small little things that I have mentioned above might help step by step to produce less rubbish.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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