Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is argued by
few people
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a few people
the few people
that recent advancements in
technology
have made people more social while others
cosider
deem to be
consider
it to be detrimental. In my opinion,
although
modern
technology
in the form of
internet
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the internet
and international travelling much
easier but
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easier, but
it has affected social and family
life
. On the one hand, technological advancements in the form of
aeroplane
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an aeroplane
the aeroplane
and
internet
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the internet
has brought
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have brought
people together. The
world
has now turned into
global village
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a global village
where people from anywhere in
world
interacts and can meet persons practically in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
corner of
world
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the world
.
This
has apparently made interaction much easier.
For example
, with the availability of
scoial
relating to human society and its members
social
media groups like
facebook
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Facebook
, twitter and
instagram
, one can gain knowledge about the culture and traditions of people around the
world
so the modern
technology
has made
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
sociable in many respects.
On the other hand
, some people argue that same
technology
has negative influence on family
life
of people.
Internet and
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Internet, and
mobiles are available everywhere so people when travelling or when at home
instead
of having
conversation
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a conversation
with the person sitting nearby would chat with someone far away.
This
has disastrous consequences and the societies are tremendously affected by it.
For example
, there is
recent increase
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the recent increase
a recent increase
in trend of divorce amongst married couples and social media is blamed for it.
when
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When
spouses return home
from
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since
they have been seen to spend time on social
netwroking
an interconnected system of things or people
networking
rather
tha
conjunction used in comparatives
than
to
eachother
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each other
reasulting
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
resulting
in matrimonial disharmony. So the modern
technology
has much negative influence on family
life
. In conclusion, modern
technology
may have some positive effects on our
lives but
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lives, but
the
drawabacks it
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drawbacks, it
drawbacks it
drawback it
has on our social
life
are much worse and it should be used with care
.
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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