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Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
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 have different views about whether studying
history
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 can assist them in understanding the present times or the
history
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 of the past does not make any sense. Personally,
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 communities have the right to learn historical information or not, I completely believe that by knowing their past society can gain some benefits. On the one hand, it is probably true that knowing the
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 of
people
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 cannot significantly change the future time. It is all about the fact that some of the information in the written timeline may not be true.
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, individuals cannot simply claim that their past was as they say it was without any evidence.
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, I think that historical facts are for us to just realize how the time was before and experience that period by reading or listening to them.
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, many schools provide
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 lessons in order to make pupils understand their background, ancient famous
people
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 and traditions.
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, there are a number of pros of learning the
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.
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, in many countries today, the study of
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 is valued for helping
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 understand the present.
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, plenty of individuals realise how and to whom they currently exist by reading or studying their ancient
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.
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, humans are not born with knowledge of their traditions and mentality. It means that only through saved and written historical elements they are able to figure out their own traditions and so on.
In addition
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, the
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 is
also
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 impactful in order to
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 other nations. To give a clear example, in some
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 students
also
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 study world
history
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 and after they obtain some knowledge about different countries, near and far. In conclusion, society has the freedom to choose to study or not to touch
history
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, but I believe that through knowledge of the past
people
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 can realise what they are today

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Your essay successfully addresses the prompt by discussing both viewpoints and providing your opinion. This is crucial for achieving a higher task response score. However, to further improve, ensure that your examples are varied and more specific.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is generally well-structured with clear paragraphs. The introduction and conclusion are effectively presented. To enhance logical flow, make sure that each paragraph transitions smoothly from one point to another.
task response
You've given a complete response to the task by discussing both sides of the argument and then presenting your own viewpoint. However, consider adding more varied examples and more comprehensive ideas to strengthen your argument further.
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There are small grammatical and stylistic errors that slightly affect the clarity of your argument. Pay attention to sentence structure and verb consistency.
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Your handwriting skills demonstrate a clear understanding of the task and the ability to express complex ideas effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps the reader to follow your argumentation easily.
task response
You have successfully covered multiple aspects of the task, which enriches the discussion and provides a more rounded view of the topic.
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You have articulated a clear opinion, which is important for the task response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • anachronistic
  • cultural heritage
  • perspective
  • historical context
  • societal norms
  • contemporary
  • evolution
  • progress
  • modern advancements
  • conflicts
  • tensions
  • academic
  • practical skills
  • subjective
  • victors
  • marginalized groups
  • dwelling on the past
  • irrelevant
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