The use of corporal punishment (physical hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is currently a contentious argument over whether corporal punishment should be applied in academic institutions to modify students’ behaviour. In my opinion, I totally disagree with

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opinion because violent punishment may lead to poor academic performance and increase tendency of violent behaviours of students. The main reason why I disagree with the belief that students should be punished by corporal methods is because

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that) it may cause students to study badly. Hitting students not only triggers physical injuries, but

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mental damages. In a long run, students feel frightened when going to

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and detest their teachers.

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, they lose their interest in studying and perform badly at

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. To illustrate, my younger brother is very talkative, so he always got corporal punishments at

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by his Math teacher when he was in

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6th grade

. Now, he hates Math and cannot perform well in Math in grade 12 as he hated his Math teacher in

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6th grade

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, another reason why I do not support the notion that educators should hit students to change their behaviours is due to the fact that it may accelerate violent behaviours among students. The youth tend to learn from adults’ behaviours.

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, if adults impose violent punishing techniques on students when they misbehave, they will learn that they could use violent behaviours with people who cause

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trouble

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, my cousin, a 6-year-old boy, fought his classmate at

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because his friend took his notebook without asking for his permission. He said that he wanted to teach his friend that he should ask for the owner’s permission before borrowing something.

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, he said that he learnt

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violent punishing method from his teachers because his teachers hit him whenever he forgot his student books at home. In conclusion, I completely disagree that corporal punishments should be used in schools to adjust students’ behaviours because it may worsen academic

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and foster violent habits of students. Given

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situation, it seems that educators should utilize other techniques to punish students

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as reducing some of their rights in class or lowering their marks.

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short-term compliance
long-term behavioral improvements
emotional damage
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