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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the adventages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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In general, nutrition plays an important role in people's lives. Everyone cares very much about it and there are different type of the comfort foods for everyone. The need for
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 these days is very high. Maybe, the reasons are the rapid increase in the number of people.
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, great emphasis is placed on the comfort of eating. In short, there are many types of
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 in life,
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 fast
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, homemade foods, delectable foods and others. People choose these foods for themselves and do it their way of life. A person who eats the
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 comfortable for him or her walks all day long calm and cheerful. The advantage of easy dining is that people enjoy eating what they like. We can
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 add healthy meals to your meals which is something that everyone will enjoy. Eating well is a major part of our lives, because we need to eat to survive. No doubt, some foods that people find comfortable, maybe harmful them and can have a detrimental effect on their
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. As we know, there are foods that are harmful to human
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. Unfortunately, some people enjoy harmful foods and have incorporated them into their lifestyle. Eating unhealthy foods will have a detrimental effect on your
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 in the future. Currently, most people are suffering, from a number of diseases related to
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 poisoning and malnutrition. Clearly, many people have incarporated harmful foods into their eating habits In conclusion, we have seen the pros and cons of eating well when people put their healthy foods in the rhythm of eating their
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 will not be effected
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