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In many countries government spend a lot of money on arts. However, some think government should spend more on health and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #government #money #arts #think #health #education
The graphs illustrate the structure of a local
museum
, which was small in size, and its view in both 1957 and 2007. Overall, the
museum
 refurbished with numerous elements
such
 as special exhibition, education
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
, shop, cafe, reception, and car parking.
Conversely
, the garden road stayed same as before. In 1957, there was a national history exhibition held with divided on two
part
Suggestion
parts
 like special exhibition and learning
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 in 2007.
Next
 the local history room doubled in 2007, and there
were
Suggestion
was
 a new shop, reception place built. Interestingly, in 2007 a cafe
was include
Suggestion
was included
included
 for the visitors.
Besides
, The entrance hall located beside the store room in 2007, which replaced in 2007 with the
museum
 shop.
Moreover
, the road found same in both
timeline
Suggestion
timelines
,
however it
Accept comma addition
however, it
 was attached
with
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to
museum
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the museum
 in 2007.
Finally
, the garden situated at the same position, but the amount reduced in 2010.
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