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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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Many people adopt to live in a
house
, while other people who think or feel
otherwise
. They believe that living in an
apartment
 has more benefits than the
house
.
Although
, living in an
apartment
 has its own benefits,
however
, a
house
 gives space for children to play and for everyone to enjoy the nature while flats lack
both
 of them. One the one hand,
both
 houses and apartments offer benefits; a
house
 offer freedom to do whatever someone wishes and spacious place to walk around or children to play in backyard or garden.
Similarly
, a flat or an
apartment
 has advantages
such
 as they are more
secured
Suggestion
secure
 than houses, easy to maintain and manage as compare to
house
.
On the other hand
, drawbacks of
both
 living places are considerable. A
house
 is expensive to live in, hard to keep it clean and well settled.
In addition
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 little space offered by an
apartement
a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house
apartment
, there are always privacy and
limition
restricting the scope or freedom of action
limiting
limitation
 to do anything in
a
Suggestion
an
apartment
.
Although
both
 houses and flats/apartments have
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 own drawbacks.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think houses offer more advantages than an
apartment
.
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