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Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a 'gap year', before they begin work of university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Nowadays, many teenagers expect to get a
year
 for travelling before working or studying at a university. The reason for their demands is to make them see a wider range of opportunities and choices and I
also
 agree with them. On the one hand, teens will gain a lot of knowledge by travelling. The different cultures of many countries can be seen if they have enough time for vacations.
Moreover
, taking a trip can reduce our stress and feel energized for the
next
 step. Meanwhile, students can visit to their native town and reunite with their family. Beside travelling, young learners can
also
 have a chance to prepare well for
further
 education in a
year
.
Likewise
, adults can save money by doing a part-time job which might be helpful in their professional work.
For instance
, I volunteered about a
year
 as a radiographer in one of the government hospitals before I begin work.
On the other hand
, taking a
year
 for the holiday is wasting our precious time.
Therefore
, I
also
 agree that there will be problems if young people are taking a
year
-off.
For example
, visiting to many places within a
year
 can be expensive and it will be a burden for your family to pay for your expenditure.
Then
, you will lack motivation about your future while you are only focusing on travelling.
Next
, you will face difficulties to memorize your previous study after taking a long trip. Overall, I strongly agree that youths should have a holiday before learning at college or starting their work.
However
, a
year
 off is to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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