Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school?

Many
school
-age children can’t get support from their families related to their
school
academic performance.
However
, some parents interested lay their
children overbearing
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children, overbearing
and that’s
affects
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affected
affecting
negatively in kids. In my opinion, I believe that parents should keep their kids under pressure in their educational process but not too much.
Firstly
, when parents keep their
children overbearing
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children, overbearing
in their learning, they will assist them to build their characters and
also
it will assist them to develop their academic level. By
this
I mean, if parents take care of their children at an early
age even
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age, even
at
Suggestion
in
kindergarten to support them, they would like to achieve more in different fields which are provided by the administration.
For example
, I encouraged my son who aged 5 years old, to participate in a competition for innovation 2020. He creates a
smartboard
to assist young children to be
creatives
having the ability or power to create
creative
and learning independently and they chose his project to be one of the best ten innovative projects created by students around the UAE.
Moreover
, from
this
experience, my son felts proud of himself and he became more confident because people named him the youngest scientist and he became famous in
school
and AL Ain city.
Secondly
, children who are constantly pressured by their parents will have the opportunity to obtain into the most prestigious schools or get the best scholarships to prepare their kids for the future to have a better vocation with high salaries.
As a result
of
this
, when they grow up, they have the choice to study in a country or either abroad where ever they
want
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
went
around the world.
For instance
, my brothers who are under pressure in their studies from my
parents had
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parents, had
scholarships in the US and the UK because they had a high GPA in the
school
and they employed with a high salary.
In addition
,
this
pressured to assist them to be independent of themselves. In conclusion, parents should be
cares
Suggestion
caring
about their children academically in
school
, but without pressuring them.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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