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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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 most of the celebrities are highly paid, some people feel that entertainers
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 as singers, actors and sportsmen pay an excessive amount of money. I tend to agree with the thought that entertainers draw large sums of money. Despite the fact, entertainers don’t possess any technical skills, they are paid huge.
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 is because of their popularity and views of people about them. Governments pay them for their performances, rewards when they bring good name to their country by winning. They are often appointed as brand ambassadors by some companies at the cost of millions. Singers, musicians and film stars attend events at certain charges as they presence gathers huge crowds. Contrary to many they make, entertainers don’t posses any extraordinary talents.
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, professionals like scientists, engineers, doctors and computer scientists possess technical knowledge and talents which helps in scientific developments about the world and saves us from natural disasters. They should be more as of entertainers. In the conclusion, I think entertainers make more money without technical skills and I believe technical professionals
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 as doctors, engineers and scientists should be paid more.
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