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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagrams illustrate
about
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how the
wave-
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wave-energy
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energy
machine
 is designed and the suitable station for it.
Overall
 the engine works with the help of the
waves
 on the seashore. Looking at the diagram the appliance has two chambers, one is beneath the
sea water
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 related to
waves
 and the other chamber id is combined with turbines and
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a generator
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generator
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generators
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 above the expanse
water
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of water
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. With regards to water level and
waves
, air flow
pass
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 through to the canal through
second
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 chamber and by that,
turbine
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the turbine
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 rotates
voluntary
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.
Similarly
, air flow from outside pass inside the chamber,
the
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 other turbine rotates
also
. Meanwhile, the generator would produce
the
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electricity depending on the power of the
air flow
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airflow
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. Over to the position of
wave
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the wave
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energy
machine
, the diagram demonstrates there are two locations, one
in
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at
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 deep
sea
 level and the other near
to
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the shore in less deep. The spot in the deep
sea
 cost of installation is highly expensive compared to the mid surf
,
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 but can produce high power of
energy
 with the help of larger
waves
.
On the other
hand
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 mid
sea
 level
machine
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machines
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 will produce less power
of
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energy
 because
due to
 smaller
waves
.
To sum up
,
cost
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the cost
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 of
insatallation
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installation
 is high for large wave output in
deep
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the deep
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sea
 than
to
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for
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mis
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miss
sea
spot
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spots
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, but
efficiency
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the efficiency
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 of electricity produced is higher for large wave
machine
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machines
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, machine, waves, sea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 9 times.
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