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Some people say that the best way is to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Increasing transit in today’s society is leading to serious accidents which eventually take the lives of people. I disagree to a greater extent that to increase the legal youth to
drive
 vehicles, as there are many other factors which needs to be tackled to increase
drive
 security. Primarily,
transport
 congestion in today’s need to be taken care of. It is need of proper transportation management of government like installing movement, lights, providing live travel status on an app / website, creating proper pedestrian crossing and many more. Statistically, lots of people lost lives in
roadway
 accidents due to factors like over speeding, inaccurate driving, not taking precautions while driving. Governments should create awareness among the public for
roadway
 freedom measures. The other way to improve
this
 situation is to create proper and convenient public
transport
 facilities. If a public
transport
 is cheaper, convenient, easier to travel than a person will prefer public
transport
 over personal vehicles.
However
, neophytes are more enthusiastic to
drive
 a car or to ride a bike at a younger maturity.
Although
 teenagers are allowed to ride a vehicle having lower specifications (
such
 as 110cc moped) at a younger age, they ride at an
overspeed
 in city areas which eventually, turn into fatalities. Looking for the above scenario, in order to improve
drive
Suggestion
driving
 security, legal youth to ride a car or bike should be increased only up to a year or two. Other than that, Nowadays youngsters
also
 challenge among their friends, doing stunts, racing competition on vehicles among themselves and
also
 using vehicles for entertainment rather than need. To sum up, it is essential to improve other factors which play a major role in
roadway
 accidents rather than increasing
roadway
 safety. Government should take effective steps to improve
roadway
 safety and to curb fatalities of loss of lives on
roadway
Suggestion
roadways
the roadway
.

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