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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. other, However, believe that school is the people to learn this. Discuss both views and giver your opinion.

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People are thinking you tough in childhood. A kid learns to same as parents and school.I totally disagree that only the parent is responsible for teaching good manners to their children
also
 teacher play equal role.
This
 essay will discuss both views. Parents should guide the children how to deal with the society.Parents always to be good. A child always follows parents, so parents teach to how to good member in society. A child's basic quality and obey the rules of the community and how to respect others. A parent always teaches how to behave, table manners and much more. A parent
first learn
Suggestion
first learns
 their children.A child learns from early childhood becomes a part of characteristics.
On the other hand
, Nowadays children are not having sufficient time to spend with parents because of the parents might be employed or the are keeping their kid in a hostel, so the kid believes their teachers.A teacher learns about to soft skill to share their things or food, feeling and how to behave with the same group companions. The teacher is
also
 good to learn about character and behaviour. Overall, It can be both of view equal significance and I believe both are equally important for the best quality in children.
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