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Some experts believe that it is better to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the present date, there are more and more private elementary
school
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 following globalize trend. Not only they add many
language
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 courses, but
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 import a lot of foreign teachers. Even so elementary students could receive these education with some drawback,
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, their study schedule will be tight and it will increase a significant
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 on the children.
This
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 essay will analyse the advantages and disadvantages of adding a foreign
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classlanguage
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class language
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 in primary
school
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.
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 with, the main disadvantages of teaching foreign
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 are growth disruption and high tuition cost. Even if the
school
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 could have added
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language
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a language class
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 out of their good will, the student has to carry
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 as, tight schedule, less play
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 and homework at
this
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 young age. As the growth is important for a child, these children need a certain amount of
time
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 for themselves to develop both mind and body.
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, they could not have many football match due to the tight schedule for
language
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class
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 and become less active.
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, elementary
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 with these
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class
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classes
 will have to increase their tuition fee to cover the increasing cost, as a consequence, their parents might have to withdraw their children from these
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school
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schools
.
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, the main advantage of teaching foreign
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 in a grade
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 is their age, free
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 and opportunity. Regarding the period of growth that have high capability to learn and adapt which they have a lot of free
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, youthful mind, and full support from their parents.
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, they could improve their skill quickly because these students do not have any
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. The higher grade
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therefore have
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therefore has
has therefore had
 to deal with their career path, homework, and necessary task.
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, if they could learn a secondary
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language language
 in their early education life, they might have had broadened their study while they are attending their high
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 period.
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, Robotic area which is infamous of majorly of its textbook were written in English. In the same manner, knowing the secondary
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 will broaden their social life. If they could have been proficient in English or known many languages, they might have made many foreign friends by now. To summarize, elementary
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 with foreign
language
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class
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 can out weight the disadvantage as these children will need these benefits in their future. It is better if they could at least proficient with their secondary
language
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 before they enter their high
school
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. As they could relieve
language
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burden
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 beforehand.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bilingualism
  • Linguistic development
  • Cognitive flexibility
  • Cultural competence
  • Neuroplasticity
  • Holistic education
  • Language acquisition
  • Language immersion
  • Proficiency
  • Primary education
  • Secondary education
  • Pedagogical approaches
  • Early language exposure
  • Academic enrichment
  • Multilingualism
  • Cross-cultural interactions
  • Fluency
  • Curriculum integration
  • Language pedagogy
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