The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above graph shows the total number of
trips
made by
children
in a country
by
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using different modes of
transport
in the years 1990 and 2010. It compares the usage of different modes of
transport
to and from school by
children
aged 5-12 years in the years 1990 and 2010. In 1990, the graph shows walking as the most used means of
transport
by
children
while
travelling to and
fro
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from
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school which is approximately 12.5
million
trips
. The mode of
transport
which is least used in 1990 is
car
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a car
the car
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which is approximately 4.5
million
trips
. Cycling and walking and
bus
are used almost
similarly
as
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with
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round
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around
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6
million
in 1990. After walking, travelling by
bus
is mostly used by
children
in 1990. In 2010, the graph shows
car
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the car
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as the most used
transport
approximated to 11
million
trips
.
However
, cycling is the least used mode of
transport
approximated to 3
million
trips
. The other modes of
transport
like walking and
bus
are used
as
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around 6
million
and 5
million
trips
in 2010. Walking and
bus
together are used in almost 3
million
trips
. In
comparison
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,comparison
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car
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cars
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is most used in 2010
while
walking was most used in 1990.
However
, walking, cycling and
bus
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busing
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is used more in 1990 and less in 2010. It can be interpreted that with the advent of technology in 2010, cars were highly preferred as means of
transport
which reduced the usage of walking, cycling and
bus
as means of
transport
in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, children, transport, million, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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