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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is
sole responsibility
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the sole responsibility
 of media to aware people about problems happening in the
country but
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country, but
 due to changing
trend
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trends
 among media they are focusing to broadcast problems and negative
development
. I completely agree with the statement that it makes bad influence on society
To begin
 with, bad news makes negative thoughts
about
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about a country’s
country
’s
development
, to be clear, it makes people negative thinker about
growth
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the growth
 of the
country
.
Secondly
, People never know about positive
development
 like some positive initiatives taken by
government
 for improving
economy
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the economy
 of the nation.
Thirdly
,
lot
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lots
a lot
 of stress sitting on the head of the people in these days and on the top, if they watch always bad reports
then
 people will stop watching news channel.
However
, show problems and emergencies displays image of the current
government
 that what kind of steps they are taking for the nation.
For example
,
recent amendment
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recent amendments
a recent amendment
the recent amendment
 in Indian constitution regarding
same law
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the same law
to
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in
 every state in India effects in one of the states got viral globally, lots of people in that state think that worse step taken by
government
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the government
 but media explains to the nation behind positive
development
 of that state. In nutshell, media have to update people regarding negative and positive
development
 going in their
country
.
In addition
, always broadcast bad news to people lost chance to appreciate the positive developments doing by
government
. Media should broadcast every news doesn’t
matter it
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matter, it
 is negative and positive
development
 so
induvial
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the individual
individual
an individual
individuals
 can know about
current situation
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the current situation
 of their
country
. In that way
media
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the media
 can build more trust
on
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of
 the people.
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  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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