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Essay topics: In some countries, more and more adults are living with their parents after graduating from college , University or even after finding a job. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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In
this
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in
few countries
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a few countries
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majority
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the majority
 of adult people want to spend their
life
 with their parents after completing their graduation in college, University or searching a job.
This
 essay will not only highlight the welcoming sides of
this
 phenomenon, but
also
 present some downsides as well. To
beigh
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being
be
 with
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the myriad of profound points can be mentioned in the positive side.The
first
 and foremost
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if adults are living their aristocratic
life
 with their family
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then
 it will be easy for them to do some work
such
 as making food and some domestic works.
In addition
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in the blind run behind materialism, adults are working from
down
the first light of day
dawn
 to dusk to earn two
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squares
 of meal for accomplishing their dreams.
As a result
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they
donot
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do not
 have adequate time to make healthy food as well as they feel so tired after doing work at their workplace
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so
this
 all will be easy for them if they stay with family members.
what
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What
 is more, by sharing their daily routine
life
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they get some suggestions from their loved ones.
Consequenty
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Consequently
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it will be fruitful for them
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while taking any cardinal decisions. Moving
further
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to
the darker
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the dark
 side,
first
 of all
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if adults live their
life
 far from their homes, sometimes they may feel lonely and leading stressful
life
.
Moreover
, living with family cannot give him enough freedom and sometimes they have conflicts with their parents.
Furthermore
, there may be
burden
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a burden
 on their guardian to spend some exorbitant
expences
amounts paid for goods and services that may be currently tax deductible (as opposed to capital expenditures)
expenses
experiences
expense
 of their offsprings. In conclusion
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by citing all the positive and negative points
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it can be concluded that I still believe that these minor disadvantages are of no importance if we look at the advantages
this
 situation has offer.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boomerang generation
  • financial security
  • mutual dependence
  • nurturing environment
  • multi-generational households
  • intergenerational bonding
  • cultural heritage
  • autonomy
  • interpersonal conflicts
  • social norms
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