Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Zoos are famous for its popularity and recreation. While some people agree that zoos would provide a habitation to save some endangered animals, I would argue that zoos should be shut down for some reasons. On the one hand, a large

numbers

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number

of people believe that zoos are excellent habitats. Many species are in danger of extinction. It is undeniable that zoos are

the good

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the best

place for these animals to live with the protection by the trained staff. To illustrate, back to

few years

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a few years

ago, panda became under a real threat of being

extinct but

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extinct, but

now they are in safety by zoos.

Besides

, deforestation

are happening

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is happening

in many countries.

For example

, in

this

year, Amazon rain forest has

burnt which

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burnt, which

causes to many creatures’ death and a lack of animals’ land. By these reasons, zoos would be

the safe

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the safest

environment to prevent the animals from forest fire and forest devastating consequences.

On the other hand

, it is argued that the zoos should be closed down.

This

problem can be attributed to a host of reason.

Although

it is

truth

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true

that some animals which being risk of intimidation

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human attack should be saved, the other species which are not in the category

also

need freedom to live in the

wild life

all living things (except people) that are undomesticated

wildlife

Additionally

this

kind of animal

are mainly used

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is mainly used

for education and entertaining activities.

However

, these animals are not meant to be caged and their distress are seemed to happen every day. If we consider zoos as saved places for animals, it could be done

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another environment

such

wild life

all living things (except people) that are undomesticated

wildlife

or natural parks and so on. It will be the best place for the animals to have freedom. In conclusion, while some people think that zoos are animals’ residences, I believe that zoos should stop their services.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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animal welfare
conservation
captive breeding
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ethical issues
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wildlife education
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