Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Zoos are famous for its popularity and recreation. While some people agree that zoos would provide a habitation to save some endangered animals, I would argue that zoos should be shut down for some reasons. On the one hand, a large
numbers
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number
of people believe that zoos are excellent habitats. Many species are in danger of extinction. It is undeniable that zoos are
the good
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the best
place for these animals to live with the protection by the trained staff. To illustrate, back to
few years
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a few years
ago, panda became under a real threat of being
extinct but
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extinct, but
now they are in safety by zoos.
Besides
, deforestation
are happening
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is happening
in many countries.
For example
, in
this
year, Amazon rain forest has
burnt which
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burnt, which
causes to many creatures’ death and a lack of animals’ land. By these reasons, zoos would be
the safe
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the safest
environment to prevent the animals from forest fire and forest devastating consequences.
On the other hand
, it is argued that the zoos should be closed down.
This
problem can be attributed to a host of reason.
Although
it is
truth
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true
that some animals which being risk of intimidation
by
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of
human attack should be saved, the other species which are not in the category
also
need freedom to live in the
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
.
Additionally
,
this
kind of animal
are mainly used
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is mainly used
for education and entertaining activities.
However
, these animals are not meant to be caged and their distress are seemed to happen every day. If we consider zoos as saved places for animals, it could be done
for
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in
another environment
such
as
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
or natural parks and so on. It will be the best place for the animals to have freedom. In conclusion, while some people think that zoos are animals’ residences, I believe that zoos should stop their services.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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