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ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this ? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?

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Following
a
Suggestion
an
ideol
conforming to an ultimate standard of perfection or excellence; embodying an ideal
ideal
personality
 is in fashion
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
. Print media or television has played a significant role in inherent traits of eminent
person
Suggestion
personalities
.
Although
 some consider as an opportunity to live the life of their
ideol
conforming to an ultimate standard of perfection or excellence; embodying an ideal
ideal
idol
idols
person
, others think they lose their original attributes of their
personality
 traits. As per my thought, it's vital to copy only those attributes which help in positive ways. It is undeniable fact that grasping a
personality
 trait of an
ideol
conforming to an ultimate standard of perfection or excellence; embodying an ideal
ideal
idle
person
 has a pivotal role in individual life. But would it be logical
ti
in the direction of
to
 copy the
ideol
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
idea
? Actually, it depends. It is always advisable to consider only the good habits.
Firstly
, how the
person
 speaks, How they behave with elders and young people. It is vital to know and understand the politeness in their tone while talking to others.
Secondly
, we see the
ideol
conforming to an ultimate standard of perfection or excellence; embodying an ideal
ideal
idol
person
 is healthy and perform the exercise on a daily basis. Followers
also
 made themselves and start taking care and gradually pick healthy habits.
However
, everyone knows that everyone has all good qualities. It is
promienent
having a quality that thrusts itself into attention
prominent
permanent
 that not to indulge in bad habits after following these famous
personality
Suggestion
personalities
. It would be better to quote an example for the same. Drinking and
smoking which
Accept comma addition
smoking, which
 is
ingerous
harmful to living things
injurious
 to health. In the same way, some personalities seen in an
advertisementof
Suggestion
advertisement of
 Pepsi and Coke ads. As we all know that it
contans
include or contain; have as a component
contains
 70% of sugar and excess sugar is not at all good for
body
Suggestion
the body
. So it is vital to keep
ourself
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
 away from these qualities. To recapitulate, it would be always give a double thought while following the
ideol
conforming to an ultimate standard of perfection or excellence; embodying an ideal
ideal
ideals
idol
person
. Grasping good qualities are always helpful in out life. So whenever we follow a great
personality
 only for positive attributes.

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