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Today more people are waiting until their thirties to get married and have children. Do you think this is a positive and negative development?

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Starting
family
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a family
 at around thirties has gained popularity and became more and more common among adults in recent years.
However
, I believe that
this
 trend has
wholly positive impact
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a wholly positive impact
 on our society for two reasons.
Firstly
, people became more responsible, when they got older and a chance of divorcing will be dramatically reduced. Older people always care about their family and children by virtue of
higher sense
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a higher sense
 of responsibility compared to
younger generation
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the younger generation
younger generations
a younger generation
. A good illustration of
that is
 most young people start their family without a true perception of family,
as a result
 the majority of them got divorced. While, some might believe that
the older
Suggestion
older
 people getting are, the more selfish they are, but I argue that adults
at
Suggestion
in
 their thirties are becoming put others at
first
. Another positive impact of the late marriage is
financial state
Suggestion
the financial state
 of people.
In other words
, people in their thirties or older are making quite sure of their own financial future before committing to a legal relationship. In
this
 age people will be ready to supply their family with all necessities to live, especially with
good
Suggestion
better
 life conditions.
Moreover
, feeding and growing up children is
integral part
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an integral part
 of family, which require strength from parents, in that case those families prefer having their
children older
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older children
. Take interviews in Great Britain
for example
, an overwhelming majority of those said they would not have children unless they could afford to have them. To sum up, not only late marriage resulted in couples being more responsible, but it has
also
 allowed people to build their career and be financially ready.
Therefore
, I believe that it is wholly positive development for our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • matrimonial timing
  • fertility issues
  • career-oriented
  • financial security
  • societal norms
  • generational divide
  • personal fulfillment
  • personality development
  • biological clock
  • extended adolescence
  • family planning
  • child rearing
  • socioeconomic factors
  • traditional milestones
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