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Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level (Primary, Secondary, Higher). However, some say that individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The jury is still out on whether the state should provide all forms of
education
 free of charge.
While
 some
people
 believe that tertiary
education
 should have tuition fees for students, eliminating uninterested students, I side with those who argue that free
education
 can bear fruit in the long perspective. Some
people
 believe that tuition fees to enter university can be a filter for the majority of
people
 who do not need higher
education
. In the case of free higher
education
, there may be
people
 who are not interested in becoming professionals, but just spend their time studying.
Consequently
, it can be a waste of resources, for both universities and the government, which is likely to have other areas to invest into. Others believe that the state should allocate funds for all stages of
education
.
This
 is because the benefits of a well-educated population are long-lasting. The general population gains when there is a ready supply of doctors, business
people
, teachers, and scientists who can contribute to the tax system during their lifetimes.
Additionally
, the most capable and talented learners who come from poorer backgrounds can participate in the economic circulation
due to
 educational opportunities.
Thus
, gratis studies can improve the whole well-being of society in the long term and I side with
this
 point of view.
To conclude
,
while
 some
people
 believe that
education
 should be paid, I stand with those who are sure that the government should invest
into
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people
’s learning because it can impact the future prosperity of the population.
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Add more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific countries where free higher education has had positive effects.
coherence cohesion
Consider refining the transition between different points of view to make the essay flow even more smoothly.
task achievement
The essay provides a comprehensive response to the prompt, addressing both views and giving your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is well-organized and easy to follow. Your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are clearly delineated.
coherence cohesion
The main points are well-supported and effectively argued.
task achievement
Your ideas are clear and comprehensive, making your stance easy to understand.

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