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The plans below show the layout of one of the university’s offices in the past
(
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(
2005) and now. Overall, the interior of the
office
 noticeably changed, with
new range
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a new range
 of
office
 equipments even some walls were demolished.
Initially
 the
office
 was divided into four rooms. Each room was designed as a classical
office
 with
couple
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a couple
 of desks and
filling
the entering of a legal document into the public record
filing
 cabinets. And in the main room was a photocopier
inthe
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in the
 right
handside
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hand side
 from the entrance,
moreover there
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moreover, there
 were filling cabinets and
noticeboard
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notice-board
next
 to the copier. The
second
 plan shows that significant changes were mostly in the southern part of the
office
. It’s clear that
the most noticeably
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most noticeable
the most noticeable
 change was removing the walls. We can see that water cooling and coffee machine were installed to the left
handside
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hand side
from
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of
entrance
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the entrance
.
Moreover
, near those, designers introduced sofa and table with two armchairs, in order to provide employees
good atmosphere
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a good atmosphere
 to sit and relax with
coup
a small open container usually used for drinking; usually has a handle
cup
 of coffee. Another small change was done with
noticeboard
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notice-board
notice board
, clearly it was transported to the opposite side.

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