Educaiton for young poeple is important in many countries.However, some people think that the government should spend more money on education in adult populations who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Overall the report has a clear
visualization
and in most of the cases communicates the information that it intends to. Even at the start it has uses a map
visualization
to provide details on the list of participants by region with the numbers. The categorization of companies is clearly described with a scatter plot using the size of the ball depicting the numbers under each category. In most cases when comparing the
progress
of Torchbearers
vs
Aspirationals the reports uses the bullet charts as
visualization
to communicate the
progress
by each category and
also
to to rank the
progress
against each other. The bullet
chart
communicates the
progress
and provides a visual
comparison
between the two categories. In places where they have used
bar
charts.
For example
, under “Abundance amid scarcity” it looks as though it is a stacked
bar
chart
and the audience tend to look for a numerical value on the x and y axis. In
this
case it is the same
comparison
of Torchbearers
vs
Aspirationals
progress
. The user has to read the content to understand/interpret the
bar
chart
. Which violates the concept of
visualization
(Where the picture has to describe the data). In my opinion, I think a pie
cart
a visual display of information
chart
would have been a better alternative to show the percentage out of the whole or to be consistent we could have used the bullet
chart
.
Also
the circular
bar
graph
comparison
,
for example
figure 9 (Information rich)
also
does not clearly visualize the
comparison
. Though we could see the difference amount, the magnitude or the amount of difference is not seen clearly.
Instead
a regular
bar
graph with percentage as the numerical value would have been easier for visualizing the difference. To be more effective I think the choice of
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
should be different. For someone who is
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
blind the distinction between categories will not be clear. So choosing a
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
from the opposite spectrum
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
range would have been a good choice.

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