Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion

According to the recent studies, most of the population are tur
ning toward
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is turning
s a secured job which will help them to stay protected in their life which
on the other hand
de
creasing the in
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hand, decreasing
trest
toward
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
s many other professions like painting, handicrafts and many more. The steps taken by the government to help them to stand in the society by providing financial aid is now
being a bit
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are now being
controversial because "
money
spent for their development can be utilised for some other activities" is some people
opinio
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peoples
n.
This
essay will put forth the positives and negatives of supporting the artists and using
this
money
for some different purposes. In recent days, passion towards arts has drastically reduced
this
is due to rapid increase in technology. Many students are intrest
ed to joi
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
n either in the Engineering Sciences or Medical sector. The best example is the increasing number of institutions for Engineering and Medical
this
helps to understand the way they are put in to e
ndang
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
e
red list. To ma
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the endangered list
ke arts to be one of the bet
ter carrie
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the best
r
option
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
for yo
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options
ungsters, the best way is to provide economical support to these portion
of stu
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portions
dents and the government is doing so.
On the other hand
,
although
some may think its waste o
f
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a waste
money
because the world is developing and everyone are trying to put their efforts
to sustain in
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efforts to sustain
this
growing society. Taking
this
as a criteria, a common man's ideology is to compete
their
come or bring to a finish or an end
complete
life which in return pushing them towards opting the future trends that in return will fetch them hand fu
ll o
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a hand
f
money
.
Instead
of changing people
mind whatev
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a person's mind
person's mind
peoples' mind
peoples mind
er may be the financial assistance will be a waste. To spend these the same amount of
money
to educate the poor will be lot mor
e h
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a lot
elpful. Overall, In my opinion, the government’s idea to support the artists is a better idea because atleast
it wil
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at least
l help the exsisti
ng people
presently existing
existing
not to move in search of other jobs and I
also
think
this
may lead to increase the oppurtu
nity of cho
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
osing Arts as their carrier ways.
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