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One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing populations whilst still trying to protect the environment. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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In order to keep surviving, preserving nature has nowadays become the utmost requirement. Not only should
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 be the responsibility of the regimes that run the countries, every individual should play their part in it.
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 essay will discuss the issues governments face while building accommodations for the masses and to protect the climate at the same time.
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 and foremost, in order to construct a durable home, it is required to use materials
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 as concrete, to provide strength and stability to the structure. Usage of
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 materials releases an enormous amount of carbon dioxide in the air, which in turn makes it harmful to breathe. The ruling parties should make sure that while construction alternative materials should be used in order to ensure that the environment is not harmed. To illustrate, the use of asbestos should be promoted
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 of concrete as not only it releases less CO2, it
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 provides better durability to the structure. While the administration should keep the surroundings in mind, it should
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 ensure to implement best practices to ensure that it has enough homes for its people to stay. Implementation of organic ways to dispose of waste should be introduced by the governing agencies, especially in the high rise buildings to make sure that none of the waste disposal results in the generation of hazardous gases which makes it hard for people to live. In my opinion, it is necessary for the government to have sufficient houses ready to ensure that people get to have a roof over their head,
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, it can look forward towards implementation of alternatives which are not harmful to the habitat.

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