Many people decide on career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

In
modern world many
Suggestion
the modern world, many
the modern world many
of the people are being worried about their
career
decide it earlier and trying hard to achieve
this
goal. People become more
career
oriented in
this
era. If they
afirm
Suggestion
a firm
about the future planning of their
career
they may become
successful but
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successful, but
if they only plan the thing and don't obey it
then
the
succes
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
sources
sauces
become
dream
Suggestion
a dream
the dream
dreams
. I agree to some extent that early decision of
career
may lead to prosper life. Future planning about
career
Suggestion
a career
careers
is important to lead a
peacful
not disturbed by strife or turmoil or war
peaceful
life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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