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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discus both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others,
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however believe
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however, believe
 that they benefit more from attending mixed schools. It is the duty of parents to take
this
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 decision in a wise manner. Guardians
should kept
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should keep
 in mind that the decisions taken by them would groom the personality of their infant in that particular direction. Both schools have
different impact
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a different impact
different impacts
.
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.
 In
this
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 fast growing world, it is better to educate their kids in mixed
school
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 rather than in
separate
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separate schools
a separate school
school
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.
This
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 will help them in developing their personality. When the child
get
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gets
 growing in mixed environment, it will keep
away them from
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them away from
 shyness. Once students complete their academics, time to meet with Corporate world would come. In that world, you have to work with opposite gender
also
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. It is observed that candidates from mixed
school
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 would get easily
involve
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involved
 in office environment & are more confident than other one. The separate schooling mechanism was very old concept & is found very rarely now.
This
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 mechanism was introduced when society had harsh rules for girls. It was aimed to have a less interaction of
opposite gender
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the opposite gender
. In
this
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 present era, separate schooling will help them to concentrate more on studies & perform well. Boys & girls always remember their limit by which they are bound & prevent them from taking any wrong decisions. Both
system
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systems
 of schooling have its own benefits. But
considerng
deem to be
considering
consider
 the long term impact & need of society in
this
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 era of Globalization,
its
it is
it's
 important to involve in mixed
school
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 environment rather than separate one. Schooling
have
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has
a
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an
ever lasting
continuing forever or indefinitely
everlasting
 impact on
personality
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the personality
 of
teen
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the teen
.
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