The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
THE
CHART
ILLUSTRATED THE AMOUNT OF cash SPENT ON TEN
COUNTRIES
CONSUMER ON TRAVEL IN 2014. UNITS ARE MEASURED IN BILLION USD. THE SOURCE OF
CHART
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THE CHART
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WAS TAKEN FROM UNWTO. THE
COUNTRIES
NAME BASED
FROM
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ON
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HIGHEST
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THE HIGHEST
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POSITION ARE
CHINA
. ALL
COUNTRIES
FROM THE INFORMATION
chart
CONTAINS THE WELL KNOWN
COUNTRIES
, AFORESAID AS:
CHINA
, THE UNITED STATES, GERMANY, THE UNITED KINGDOM, SINGAPORE, SOUTH KOREA, HONG KONG, INDIA, MALAYSIA, AND
TAIWAN
. THE INFORMATION FROM
chart
WAS USING MULTIPLE OF 20 SCALES WHICH STARTS FROM 0 TO 120. FORMERLY THE GRAPH WAS
SHOWED
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SHOWN
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WITH
HORIZONTAL
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A HORIZONTAL
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DISPLAY WHICH IS ACCOMPANIED BY THE SEPARATOR LINE IN THE SCALE WITH VALUE 4.
AFOREMENTIONED
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THE AFOREMENTIONED
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WAS RELATED TO THE SOURCE FROM UNWTO
OVERALL
,
THE
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CHINA
SPENT MORE cash ON CONSUMER TRAVEL THAN
OTHER
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the OTHER
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9 (NINE)
COUNTRIES
IN 2014.
CHINA
SPENT MONEY ON TRAVEL WITH
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A CONCENTRATE
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CONCENTRATE
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CONCENTRATION
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110
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OF 110
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US $
TONS
. AFTERWARD RATED ACCORDED TO THE UNITED STATES AND GERMANY WITH 85 US $
TONS
,
AND
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FORMERLY FOLLOWED BY THE UNITED KINGDOM WITH 55 US $
TONS
, SOUTH KOREA AND HONG KONG WITH 20 US $
TONS
, INDIA WITH 15 US $
TONS
,
LATER
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AND LATER
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MALAYSIA WITH 12 US $
TONS
. THE CLOSING
RATED
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RATE
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IN
GRAPHIC
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THE GRAPHIC
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SHOWED BY THE COUNTRY OF
TAIWAN
WITH 10 US $
TONS
CONSUMED IN 2014 IN TERMS OF COMPARISON OF DONATION
CONSUMER
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CONSUMERS
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ON
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IN
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CHINA
WITH
TAIWAN
WERE
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CONTAINED 100 US $
TONS
. AS THE
chart
SHOW THE PURCHASER EXPENDED ON
CHINA
IS 11 TIMES LARGER THAN
TAIWAN
. THE ANOTHER FACT THAT
READER
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THE READER
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CAN
TOOK
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TAKE
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FROM THE GRAPH WAS FROM TOP TO BOTTOM, UNITS OF SPENDING
WAS
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WERE
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DECREASING FROM ONE TO ANOTHER. THERE ARE 2 (TWO)
COUNTRIES
THAT HAVE THE EQUALIZATION OF SPENDING
COSTUMERS
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CUSTOMERS
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EACH OTHER. SOME
COUNTRIES
IN ASIA
WAS
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TELLING US TO CONTINUE AND DOMINATE COMPARED TO OTHER CONTINENTS IN YEARS OF 2014. THE CONCLUSION FROM THE DIAGRAM WAS TELLING US ABOUT cash SPENT ON tour 2014. WE HAVE KNOWN THE
PEOPLE
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PEOPLE'S
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REPUBLIC OF
CHINA
BECOMES THE BIGGEST SPENDING PATRON IN 2014.
CHINA
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CHINA'S
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NEIGHBOURING
COUNTRIES
, HONG KONG AND
TAIWAN
ARE INCLUDED. THAT
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IS FARTHER
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FARTHER
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FURTHER
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RELATED TO
NUMBER
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THE NUMBER
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OF POPULATIONS WHERE THERE ARE POTENTIALS FOR VERY BIG TRAVELS
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, countries, china, taiwan, tons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.

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