Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. however, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think this is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

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Art is a beautiful representation of the variety of cultures from across the world. But, nowadays a very small number of people are inclined towards it and more interest is being shown in the subjects of science, technology and business. In
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newer change and would like to propose certain ways by which people could be attracted towards
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the artwork
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, it is a well-known fact that, artists are paid less as compared to other professionals.
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, in Pakistan, if we compare the monthly wedge of a bank manager or an accountant, which is around 60,000 to 80,000 rupees per month, with that of either a painter or a musician, who hardly earn an amount of 30,000 to 40,000 rupees monthly, we would find an obvious difference.
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, there are more job opportunities for people like doctors and engineers than a sculptor or
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problem of low salaries and fewer jobs is a strong reason why people are not fond of being an artist. But, if at the state level,
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issue is addressed and the government tries to offer jobs with healthy and equal salary packages to both the science and art workers, there is a high likelihood of people gaining back the interest in
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field.
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, the way a school curriculum is designed has a lot to do with the students' attraction towards art.
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is because, unfortunately, it is the perception of school and college administration that these subjects are of no value to the students when they grow up.
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matter,
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, could be very easily solved if a balanced education system
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would have a tremendous benefit as, more attention would be drawn towards pursuing the lost passion of being an artist. To conclude, by increasing the pay scale for the jobs of
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the artwork
and improvising undergraduate syllabi, the new generation could be attracted towards the long-forgotten profession of art.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Economic growth
  • STEM subjects
  • Job security
  • Financial success
  • Pragmatic
  • Utilitarian pursuits
  • Art education
  • Inclusive
  • Engaging
  • Contemporary society
  • Social issues
  • Environmental themes
  • Digital platforms
  • Virtual museums
  • Interactive art
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