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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Definition of development has always been different between people. Many of Government authorities believe that the most important
progress
 is prosperity in economics,
however
, others think different sorts of improvement have importance as same as economic
one
. There are rational arguments on both sides of
this
 topic which will be discussed in details, followed by my point of view. On the
one
 hand, there are those reasons about the power of economic is the world. Almost, all the issues around the countries are subjected by financial issues. It is undeniable that money is not the only main factor to reach success, but
also
 it makes it easier and faster.
For instance
, convenience is more in developed countries in comparison with developed countries.
Moreover
, bank statements and investments are rewarding factors to show a person is successful or not, because people respect you more if you have more money in your pocket.
Thus
, Under no circumstances is it acceptable to deny the effect of economic factors on being successful.
On the other hand
, opposite views assert that there are some other sorts of
progress
 which can be equal with economic
progress
. The most significant reason for
this
one
 is that the social behaviour of people is not more related economic
progress
.
For example
, it is obvious in developed countries that rate of violent behaviour is more than developing
one
. In the mean time, culture had been defined as a criteria of
progress
 in most of historical books.
Thus
, other factors
such
 as social manner, art and culture should be subjected as an equal factor with economic to
progress
. To conclude, there are valid arguments on both sides of the controversy,
however
, I personally think that attention should be paid to the improvement of other types of
progress inculding
Accept comma addition
progress, including
progress including
 politic since it is a pattern that can be demonstrated which country have
progress
Suggestion
progressed
 and which
one
 do not have it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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