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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Rail
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transportation
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 is one of the fastest and safest means of
transportation
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 ever. It is a special way of transport, which every country should develop and maintain. But should it be largely spent on,
such
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 that other methods of travelling should be abandoned?
This
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 essay will discuss the advantages of maintaining and encouraging the
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 transport structure;
also
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, reasons why existing public transport means should not be neglected. In my opinion, money should be equally spent developing all public methods of
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.
Firstly
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, it has been known for a while now, that less attention is being paid to the
rail
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transportation
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 structure compared to the others
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 as Air, road and sea
transportation
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.
For instance
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, the Nigeria Railway Corporation's bead office has been obsolete for years without any reconstruction or
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. In
this
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 situation, it is necessary for the government to revive the
rail
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transportation
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 structure and to construct new
rail
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 lines for the very fast trains between cities.
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, since the populace already has an existing means of
transportation
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 they all are used to, it would be more sensible and considerable if they could improve on the currently used
transportation
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 system.
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, not everyone in a certain state will gain access to a
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 station to book a ticket.
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, not every metropolis have a railway.
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, most of the residents in these areas will appreciate and enjoy smooth
transportation
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 if some funds can be spent on the existing public
transportation
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 they use.
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, since not every person will benefit from the
development
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 of the
rail
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 system, financial attention should be paid to the existing ones. In conclusion,
rail
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transportation
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 is a welcome
development
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 to improve the
transportation
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 sector of any state and it is worth spending on.
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, the existing ways of
transportation
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 should not be abandoned but should be improved too. In my point of view, every type of
transportation
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 requires
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development
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developed
 to ensure safe movements for the citizens.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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