Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crimes. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, we found that there

are

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a lot of crimes happening. People are divided in their opinion regarding punishment, on

other hand

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the other hand

, they wanted a fixed punishment and the rest believe we

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have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense

have

to decide carefully by keeping mind some consideration,

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as motivation for committing it, and circumstances of an individual crime. I will support these views with arguments in the following paragraph. Let us take a look at the

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case. The world has witnessed varieties of

wickedness wheter

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wickedness, whether

wickedness whether

wickedness water

wickedness weather

it was an extraordinary

crimes

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crime

or not.

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, drug dealer, one of massive evil at

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moment. Drugs are universal enemy due to its abuse, which leads many countries at the emergency status, and the

distributors re

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distributors, re

the most responsible person for

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damage, till they have to get a

most severe

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more severe

punishment, no more compromise, even the death penalty is

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equal

to them. Shortly, a big badness should receive a serious conviction. On

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the other hand

, as it

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is known

as ordinary crime, in

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an instance

, a case

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come to pass

occurred

in Indonesia a few years ago, a grandmother was stealing some cassavas

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was feeling

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hungry. And

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, the court called her into a judge due to her action has reported. She told

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the His Majesty the reason why she makes it, and

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based to her confession, His Majesty resolve the case by

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letting

her free. So, in several

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conditions

we have to take some deliberation,

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moreover in

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moreover, in

all the things

tht

pointing out something

that

categorized as a regular

offense

a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others

offence

office

fence

. To put it simply, we have to understand that our government has arranged the best way to reduce criminalization by using many ways. One of them

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is determining

is to determine

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, no matter what the chastisement is it, as long as it is a fair determination.

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