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Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food, than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Food
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 is an essential survival tool. To survive and avoid illnesses of any sort, one has to ensure he eats well and healthy. But, should
food
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 always be purchased rather than being prepared at home?
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 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 development. These days, every person has a thing or two occupying their
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 at every level. From being a student, who spends every spare
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 studying; to being an employee, who will always diligently perform his job functions to ensure
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 employers achieve the goals of the organization.
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, there is little or no
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 for an individual to prepare
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 for himself; meanwhile, he must eat, compulsorily.
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, a banker who resumes at work early in the morning and gets back to his home late in the evening, may never find it easy preparing
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, leaving him with no option than to purchase what he craves.
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, buying
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 has its own down sides;
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 as, unknown cooking processes; the majority of these
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 vendors do not prepare
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 with proper hygiene and ingredients.
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, a
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 vendor will ensure he gets a lot of water to cook, but no one knows where he gets it from, could be an unhealthy source.
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, the trend of buying
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, aids laziness. Cooking, as an unavoidable skill to live, should be a norm to every human; but unfortunately, a large number of people these days will prefer spending their money to order any type of meal they so desire.
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, getting used to being lazy to cook. In conclusion,
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 is one of what we need to stay alive, but people these days, care less about making
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food but
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food, but
 rather purchase, which saves a lot of
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, but that has its negative effects
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience food
  • Time-efficient
  • Culinary skills
  • Dietary habits
  • Takeout culture
  • Meal prep
  • Fast food
  • Home-cooked meal
  • Nutritional value
  • Consumerism
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Ready-made meals
  • Eating out
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