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When people succeed, it is because of their hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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I would like to agree that success has nothing to do with
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, I don't know a person who is successful that has not worked hard.
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, success can
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 be read as achieving goals. Goals could be small or big, hard or easy. But no matter whatever it is,
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one
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 has to be willing to put in the effort. In order for
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 to be successful,
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 should focus on their hard work and success is the aftermath.
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 of all,
luck
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 is an abstract word. In many religions,
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 is gained through intense prayers, and the worst part about it is that people are ready for the long hours of praying but not work for it. The craziest thing that people fall for
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being
 Lottery Tickets. There are so many people who take a Lottery Ticket so seriously that they are willing to put in their
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 month salary into buying those. To me, it sounds crazy and here's why.
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, let's say
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one
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 buys ten tickets and still his odds are ten by 5 million. I say
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 of putting those monies into lotteries, invest those monies into a book. Who knows, it could his
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her career and eventually his
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her life.
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 of all, being successful isn't easy. There are plenty of steps for
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 to be successful.
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 has to know what they are good at. If he
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she has no idea of what they are interested in, they are wasting their time. It would be better if
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 finds that out as early as possible.
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 has to be willing to sacrifice and compromise their comfort zone, because there are others who is working twice the amount.
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 is a world of competition and the
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 that pulls off the most hours, win. Discipline and punctuality are the
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 step and the most important step.
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 takes a tremendous amount of time to acquire
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 skill.
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 has to be consistent, meaning nothing like procrastination can affect what he
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she is doing.
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 is all that it takes for
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 to be successful and
luck
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 has absolutely nothing to do with it. To put it in a nutshell, work for it, don't pray for it. If it were easy, everybody would do it.
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 has got to be the other
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that is
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 unique and is willing to sacrifice his comfort zone.
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 has to walk through the harsh stairs to be successful.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • succeed
  • hard work
  • luck
  • success
  • view
  • opinion
  • essential
  • factor
  • chances
  • temporary
  • advantage
  • sustained
  • combination
  • develop
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • crucial
  • opportunities
  • individuals
  • make the most of
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