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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Many countries import
food
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 from various parts of the world because people like to eat different
food
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.
On the other hand
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, some people prefer eating their
country
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food
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 since economically their
country
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 will move forward. Both have equal advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
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, when the government brings
food
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 from other countries, people spend their money to taste it, obviously the
country
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's relationship with other countries as well as economic growth will increase.
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, the people tend to change their
food
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 style, and start adapting.
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, the KFC, an American restaurant, was introduced in India in 1993, people's
food
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 preferences has changed and the relationship with the America had become smooth since
then
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. So it is good to import new varieties of
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.
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, some people argue that economically and environmentally our nation goes down. Of course, it is true because when people eat foreign foods our
country
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's restaurant growth rate goes down.
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, leading to the loss of culture because people will not prefer their own
food
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 style.
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 environmentally our
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 products
such
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 as rice, wheat will become useless.
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, the Rajma, which is a famous
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 in Punjab, is now cultivated low because the people have stopped eating it. To conclude, In my point of view, people can eat whatever they like, but should not lose their culture which affects their nation's economic and
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 the government should limit the foreign foods, and must take some effective measures in preserving our environment and economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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