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Earlier people wore clothes which were related to their culture but now people wear same type of clothes all over the world. Is this a negative or positive development?

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In
past
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the past
, clothes
were being wore
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were worn
wore
 by people as a symbol of their culture, which has changed a lot
at
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in
this
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 present era.Due to globalization, people are tending to accept those cloths which
are commonly wear
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are commonly worn
 throughout the world.I believe,
this
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 has much more good
effects
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effect
 which
outweigh
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outweighs
 the drawback quite easily. It is undeniably true that there are some drawbacks to
this
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 tendency because it may lead to lose of a uniqueness of a nation. Traditional clothes always represent the heritage, beliefs,
tradition
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 and roots of a nation or race or entire country.While people are obsessed with
global brand
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a global brand
, they have
lee interest
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a lee interest
to
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in
 their cultural heritage.
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, a country may
lost
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lose
 their
tradition
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 permanently.
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, I believe that there are some more positive sides than negative in order to preferring similar clothes.
Firstly
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, It has an important role to eradicate discrimination to other people culture or
tradition
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.
Such
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 As, if all people wear
same clothes
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the same clothes
, no one make make fun of clothes.
For instance
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, In Africa, there are many tribes who wear
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tradition
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traditional
 dresses which are quite different than
modern world
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the modern world
.By wearing those
dress
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dresses
, if they decide to come to any international events, some people will eventually make trolls of them.
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, these clothes are less expensive, which makes it affordable to all
level
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levels
 of people.
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,
this
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 tendency is economically profitable for 3rd world countries.
For instance
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, Bangladesh, Srilanka and India have plenty of ready made
garments
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garment
 industry, from where company like H&M, Zara collect shirts
,
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,
 Jeans pants to fulfil the growing demands of these cloths.
Hence
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, people from these countries are getting
job
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jobs
 and become financially stable, which resulting economical development
for
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of
 the entire country. In conclusion, Replacing traditional clothes with global common dresses may have some
consequences but
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consequences, but
 to adopt the fast
peach
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peach's
 life,
this
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 modern era, there are no questions
to
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on
 the role of wearing similar clothes.

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