More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the causes. Whay can be done to solve this problem

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For the
last
few years we
are experiencing
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have been experiencing
have experienced
a burgeon in the number of endangered species. A large amount of animals has been disappearing in and around the world due to human activities. In order to balance the life
cycle we
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cycle, we
have to protect them and we are
oblige
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obligated
to follow the norms of
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
protection. Many categories of animals are struggling to survive because they are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. One of the significant reasons for their extinction is deforestation. People always have the tendency to expand their
infrastructire
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
,
thus
the
wirld
marked by extreme lack of restraint or control
wild
world
weird
animals lose their natural
flore
the motion characteristic of fluids (liquids or gases)
flow
florae
.
Furthermore
, the drastic
chanfe
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
change
in climate plays a crucial role in the devastation of forests. The natural calamities like forest fire, deluge
etcetera
have destroyed the habitat of wild animals.
Moreover excessive
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Moreover, excessive
poaching makes some problems in the
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
assistance
of many of the species.
For instance
, people
attacks
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attack
tigers to make luxury goods like shoes, bags, clothes
etcetera
. There are some measures to preserve
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
should organise a
world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
campaign on the importance of conserving wild animals. Nowadays people
have been throwing
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have thrown
a large amount of waste
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
the forest and
hence
it is affecting the forest
biome
.
Sexondly
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Secondly
,
government
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the government
governments
should establish
stingent
demanding strict attention to rules and procedures
stringent
laws against hunters as well as sellers of different goods made up of animal skin and fur.
Thirdly
,
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,
launching of national parks ensures the
lrotection
the activity of protecting someone or something
protection
of endangered species. To sum up, it is
duty
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the duty
of every citizen to protect endangered groups from extinction.
The strict
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Stricter
norms should regulate the crime rates towards wild animals. Above all, mankind must understand the fact that animals
also
have
equal right
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an equal right
to live
in
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on
the planet earth.
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