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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#people #laws #control #amount #noise #person #disturbance
Law plays a vital role in directing the behaviour of a person in
acceptable manner
Suggestion
an acceptable manner
. To control the
unneccessary
not necessary
unnecessary
necessary
noise
 Government should
made
Suggestion
make
 some strict rules and regulations. Excessive
noise
 has some
deletrious
harmful to living things
deleterious
 effects on human health. But legislation has some advantages as well as some
prones
dried plum
prunes
aprons
brownies
 for the peoples.
Firstly
,
their
in or at that place
there
 are various instruments
,
Accept space
,
 factories, vehicles, horns,
music system
Suggestion
a music system
 that contributes to
noise
 pollution.
Noise
 more than 80 Hz has some bad impact on a person. It
can leads
Suggestion
can lead
 to temporary or permanent deafness.
Secondly
, excessive
noise
 can
leads
Suggestion
lead
 to some neurological defects in person. Strict laws about volume of
noise
 in
resedential
used or designed for residence or limited to residences
residential
 areas, near schools and market places should be made.
Penalities
Suggestion
Penalties
 should be made along with some period of imprisonment. Government should set some
guidlines
a light line that is used in lettering to help align the letters
guidelines
 that how much volume people can use and proper time limit should be
their
in or at that place
there
. For examples In many cities in India late light Dj is not permissible, only
maximum
Suggestion
a maximum
upto
 10:00pm youth can play
Djs
a member of the genus Canis (probably descended from the common wolf) that has been domesticated by man since prehistoric times; occurs in many breeds
dogs
. All the factories should timely check all the equipments and machines and timely services should be done for the machines who produces more
noise
. Labourers should give protective ear pieces to
avoide
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
evade
abide
 more
noise
.
Governement
Suggestion
Government
 should purchase low sound producing machines. Traffic police should timely check whether any vehicle put more horns
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 appropriate actions should be made. But somewhere making strict laws
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
created
conflits
an open clash between two opposing groups (or individuals)
conflicts
 among
population
Suggestion
the population
 and make them more
voilent
acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity
violent
. Purchasing more less sound producing machines increases the
lode
weight to be borne or conveyed
load
 on the government. In conclusion,
rules
Suggestion
the rules
 should be made by Government to regulate the desirable behaviour of individuals
againt
in contact with
against
again
 producing excessive sound.
Noise
 pollution is a one of the health
concern
Suggestion
concerns
 and all the global nations should work together to stop
this
.
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