Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different opinions about whether they should admit a bad condition or try and make it better.
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there are some advantages of accepting a bad
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, I would argue that people in a bad condition should attempt and improve
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a condition. There are some good arguments for admitting a bad
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. It is unlikely that you fail and receive no damage for the reason that you don't have the risk which may occur due to failure.
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, you can keep the current
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and there is little possibility of getting it worse. When I was a child, my father worked as a businessman at a certain company and he was dissatisfied with the job because it wasn't what he wanted to do as a job.
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, he didn't afford to change his job due to his family.
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, accepting the reality, he has raised his children including me. Despite the above arguments, I believe that an effort to improve your
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is extremely important. Leading a life with satisfaction makes you happy and leads to your good mental health. If you continue adopting a bad
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, you may develop diseases in your mental,
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as depression.
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is because a bad
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always fills you with stress.
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, when my friend was a high
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student, he was bullied. During being bullied, he endured the pain and attended the
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for several months.
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, he dropped out the
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and enrolled in another
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for the reason that he was suffering from bullying and knew that it would cause mental illness on him. After that, he could make a lot of friends and enjoy his
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life. In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages of attempting and improving a bad
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outweigh those of accepting it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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