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The graph below compares changes in the birth rate of china and the usa betwwen 1920 and 2000.

The graph below compares changes in the birth rate of china and the usa betwwen 1920 and 2000.
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The line graph illustrates how the percentages of
birth
rate
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rates
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 vary in China and the USA over an
eight year
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eight-year
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 period starting from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
, there were dramatic fluctuations in the rates of
birth
of
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in
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 both countries which leads to downward trends. An analysis of the data shows
,
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apply
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the child
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child
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childbirth
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birth
rate
 in china was 10
percent
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per cent
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 from 1920 to 1930.
After
this
, it rose steeply and touch the mark 15 in around 1935.
Then
,
rate
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the rate
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 declined rapidly to 5
percent
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per cent
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 and became consistent from 1935 to 1945.
At
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 1950,
birth
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the birth
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rate
 reached
at
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a
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 peak value
by
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of
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 20
percent
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per cent
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 and
after
this
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,this
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 it was continuously shown a decreased pattern which stopped at
utmost
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the utmost
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 2 in 2000.
Moreover
,
birth
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the birth
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rate
 of children in the USA has been just above
than
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apply
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10
percent
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per cent
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 in 1920. After some blips
rate
 dipped to 5
percent
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per cent
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 in 1945 and
then
 it
had
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reached
to
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a peak of 15
percent
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per cent
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 in 1950 which is 10
percent
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per cent
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 more than
1945
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in 1945
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographic data
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • One-Child Policy
  • Great Depression
  • Baby Boom
  • fertility rate
  • economic development
  • population control
  • statistical analysis
  • life expectancy
  • decade
  • millennium
  • contraception
  • data interpretation
  • demographic transition
  • family planning
  • healthcare advancements
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